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HELP! I need crit on this fast!
It's a piece for my inking class and I was sick when it was due, so I didn't get to have a critique on it. Hopefully you guys will give me some decent feedback on it. In case you couldn't tell, it's a Boondock Saints pinup in the style of Alphons Mucha. Yup. That's about it. artwork (c) me do i need a mature content warning for the blood/body? Comments
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A few years ago my aunt got me a t-shirt for the Boondock Saints that had the whole prayer on the front. Of course, at that point I had never heard of the film, so I walked around wearing it until someone pointed it out to me. -- Step 1: Find your cousin. Step 2: Get your cousin in the canon. Step 3: Find another cousin. Goblin Fodder Canon Instructions This comment is probably too late, but the only thing I can see that needs improvement is the composition of the figures. A more balanced triangle formation would've really tied in the Religious aspect- expecially with the mention of the holy trinity up top. Also, maybe moving the kneeling brother down a bit might give more depth to it. It seems a bit like they are all on the same line right now.
That's the only thing I see off with it. I love the intricate little swirlies in the arch and corner pieces. The expressions and body language of the characters are also lovely. And of course the Latin just makes this pretty much win in my book. -- \"Creativity is allowing yourself to make mistakes. Art is knowing which ones to keep.\" ◘◘◘◘◘◘◘◘◘◘◘ haha thanks.
yeah, the composition was totally whack in the thumbnail sketch, but i tried moving the kneeling brother over to the right some more to balance it out, and I didn't want to show too much of the dead body cuz I wanted to leave it to the imagination. I thought about moving the brother down a bit more too, but by then it was too late. I guess I could try doing it in photoshop but... eh. i did change the floor though... I'll be updating that version a little later. and have you seen the movie? the Latin is from the movie... it's pretty awesome. -- 3 things make life: Process: the way you live; raw experience. Purity: honesty & humility, never lie. Passion: love & peace, exuberance of life. GO TO [link]! COMMISSION ME! [link] |
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Two things I would change are as follows:
1. The size of the hands and guns. I feel like both of these for both men are too small. Even if enlarging them would be inaccurate proportionally, I feel increasing their size at least slightly will improve the composition. Right now, it feels like the runs are almost an afterthought and not important, and if the guns are going to get bigger than the hands need to as well, otherwise it would just look silly. Also, where the kneeling brother's hand connects to his wrist/sleeve looks a bit off, but that's only minor.
2. It may be too late to change, but that same brother's position seems to throw off the balance a bit. The composition is mostly centered and symmetrical, which doesn't always work, but it in this case if you're going to do it you should go all the way. With this in mind, I feel that he should be a bit further to the left, so that he's kneeling right behind the one standing. And if this is done, maybe the corpse should be moved to the left as well as cropped off by that much, just so he'll have some space and not be kneeling right over the guy.
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